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Re: No More Butterflies
This was lovely, Crim. Oy, it hit both lyrically and concretely. You've captured a bittersweet longing that's eerie without being creepy, and I trusted the narrator's voice right off the ...
Jan 31 -
Re: Eclipse:Prologue
Ahoy! This will be a bit brief, but brevity is the soul of wit, they say. So with luck and lackadaisical, it'll be wise as well as short. Set Up ...
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Re: What I cannot change.
Oy, the prose of this poem lends scraped quality to the inner dialogue: No frills. At the same time, the tangibility of the detail tilts the prose to poetry; and ...
Feb 11, 2025 -
Re: Clown birds’ origin: “Marcia Blythe’s dear love”
Oy, what a brill creepy take on a family caught in nostalgia! I did not expect the twist at all. To a make the subtle trap of living in the ...
Jan 9, 2025 -
Re: Crown & Quill
Oy, well, you included fencing, which is always excellent -- and I had to read on to find out how the physical chess of the fencing strip wove into what ...
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Re: What is your New year's Resolution?
Ha! This was a jaunty, cheerful and slyly satiric poem, and twas fun to read! Using a an aabb rhyme scheme served the tone well, and kept the pacing speedy. ...
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Re: where the light doesn't reach, chapter 1
Ahoy! I appreciated the way you've given the primary character a voice. What drew me in was their description of their surroundings. I could feel their experience: the bus, the ...
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Re: All To Herself
Hullo! I loved the purpose and point in this: Encouragement is often scarce in post-modern poetry and prose. There's a gentle flow from isolation to interior awareness to acceptance and ...
Jan 7, 2025 -
Re: Sparking Imber chapter 1.
Ahoy there! This piece, as I read, made me think of quite a few framing potentialities. You probably know that nearly half a story is in the frame -- point ...
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Re: eclipse of the son
Hullo. Oy, what a purposeful, staccato-counter-traditional use of punctuation in this piece. You've put pauses where no "proper" pause "should" be -- and the stylistic choice rather neatly made me ...
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Re: Where Roots Refuse To Grow
Hey Elektra. Oy, the title caught my eye immediately. It offers a lot potential images, and leaves me wondering why ? which is a brilliant start to a story or ...
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Re: A Time Tale of Two
Hullo! Rather a neat way to play with a story, and I enjoyed the rhyming and meter that gave the entire thing a gentle, bouncing walk. In general, I wondered ...
Jan 4, 2025 -
Re: Fabrication: Shikri - Prologue
Oy, there's an immediate hint of humour in this that pulled me past echoes of 1984. ^_^ So simply on the initial impression--that lightness on the edge of dystopia--I read ...
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Re: Diligence
Hullo MG-- Oy, I hope you continue pursuing your writing adventures. I enjoyed the rhythm and the voice in this piece distinctly. A character's voice can be the lynchpin of ...
Jan 3, 2025 -
Re: On the Overmorrow Chapters 1-3
Ahoy B.panther! Oy, always a fun adventure with political fantasy, yes? I enjoyed reading through it, and I like that you've set up sort of an ensemble cast to intrigue ...
Jan 2, 2025
